Monday, April 27, 2009

Amaranth

There is a dark room, full of millions of candles, it might be behind that coat in your closet. It might be under your basement floor. It might be in a field in Australia, where the summer never ends, a door, to a dark room full of candles, in the middle of a beautiful field where the summer never ends.

Every candle suspended in the air, floating all on its own. Every few seconds or so, a candle goes out, and every half second, another small one falls from the black hole of a cieling that isn't there.

There is one candle imparticular, one that you can't draw your eyes away from, it is a brilliant royal blue, but that's not what draws your eye. Its the flame. It keeps fighting an invisible wind, flickering and flickering hard. You watch in amazement until water is dumped on the candle. A man, a handsome man, he stands there holding the cup that erased that brilliant flame. The man sighs, "Another cancer patient, gone."

He sets his cup down and takes the now lightless candle and puts it in a bin in the corner of the dark room full of candles, but before he does he looks at the bottom of the candle and smiles sadly, "Her name was Elizabeth." He looks at the size of the candle and sighs again. "She was three."

So now you look around this room of candles, frantically looking for your own. But there are too many, too many to look through and constantly, they are going out.

There is one candle, in a glass. The flame never flickers, not once. The man puts his hand on the glass. "That's mine. It never dies."

9 comments:

personality: unique said...

OMG! So sad. But, I like it. Are you going to make it a scene in a book or something?

Erin said...

Yes, its the start of a story. the prologue

personality: unique said...

I love it and can't wait to read more!!!

Erin said...

You have no idea how long that took me to change from an idea to an actual story. It took forever to get it off the ground.

personality: unique said...

Well, it was time well spent. It's great!

B.D.C said...

That was amazing! I really, really, REALLY want to read more.

Mr. Miller said...

nice start! get an editor. publish. do you have an outline or are you just going to take it where it goes.

Nick said...

BLOODY BRILLIANT.

ABSOLUTELY.

BLOODY.

BRILLIANT.

Erin said...

You guys are making my face smile. :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) See?